一些澳洲留學(xué)生可能會(huì)問到:如果Essay寫的句子都是短句,會(huì)不會(huì)因?yàn)樘^平淡而拿不了高分。對(duì)此,小編告訴大家,其實(shí)可以通過改寫來讓普通句子出彩。為了幫助在澳洲留學(xué)的同學(xué)們寫好Essay,本文為大家整理了四個(gè)通過改寫讓Essay代寫句子更出彩的方法:
方法1.減少there be句型的使用
there be句型很容易使用,但也很容易被濫用。在考場(chǎng)作文中我們可以見到大量的there be從句,但這些從句絕大多數(shù)可以省略。舉個(gè)例子:
There are widespread rumours of job losses.
可以改寫為:
Rumours of job losses abound.
there be句型一般表示“某地有某物”,在修改時(shí),可以使用一個(gè)恰當(dāng)?shù)膭?dòng)詞進(jìn)行替換(比如上面句子中的abound)
又比如下面這個(gè)例子:
There were more foreign students in the classroom than the natives.
可以改寫為:
Foreign students outnumbered the natives in the classroom.
除了去掉there be結(jié)構(gòu)之外,這里還使用outnumber來代替more...than...這一個(gè)比較結(jié)構(gòu)。類似的詞還有outlive,outshine,outclass,outgrow,outperform等。
方法2.使用介詞短語
很多時(shí)候,一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的介詞往往會(huì)比一個(gè)從句更為出彩,舉個(gè)例子:
(a)When they arrived at the police station,they were taken to an interview room.
(b)I'll call you when I arrive.
可以改寫成:
(a)On arrival at the police station,they were taken to an interview room.
(b)I'll call you upon arrival.
這里使用on以及upon介詞來代替when從句,類似的道理,可以靈活使用in,at,during等其他介詞來代替從句,起到事半功倍的效果。
方法.3省略關(guān)系代詞
除了there be句型之外,定語從句在Essay寫作中的使用頻率也非常高。但從簡(jiǎn)潔性的角度考慮,絕大多數(shù)的定語從句同樣可以精簡(jiǎn)。舉個(gè)例子:
From childhood,he had an instinct that made him excited and interested in all things which were electronic.
可以改寫成:
From childhood,he had an instinctive feel for all things electronic.
這里將關(guān)系代詞which以及that省略,并且原句中made him excited and interested in語義重復(fù),可以使用instinctive feel來代替。
又比如下面這個(gè)例子:
An Ideal Husband is a film adaptation of Oscar Wilde's play that tells the story of a popular politician who was involved in a scandal that led to his downfall.
句子可以改寫成:
An Ideal Husband is a film adaptation of Oscar Wilde's play that tells the story of a popular politician brought down by a scandal.
這里將關(guān)系代詞who以及that省略,句子的意思不變,但顯得更加簡(jiǎn)潔。在作文修改中,可以嘗試著將不必要的關(guān)系代詞刪除,或者將其轉(zhuǎn)換為分詞結(jié)構(gòu)或名詞詞組,以達(dá)到精簡(jiǎn)的效果。
方法4.詞性轉(zhuǎn)換
英語中有一部分單詞具有多重詞性,巧妙利用詞性轉(zhuǎn)換,可以寫出精彩的句子。舉個(gè)例子,要表達(dá)“他在上海度假”,我們可能會(huì)寫He goes on holiday in Shanghai.
但其實(shí)還可以寫成He holidays in Shanghai.這里將holiday作為動(dòng)詞使用,含義是“在……度假”。
又比如:
(a)Arthur Ashe is the captain of the U.S.team.
(b)Mr Cunningham,who teaches creative writing at Yale University,is extremely funny and psychologically observant,but he does not believe in happy endings.
上面句子可以改寫為:
(a)Arthur Ashe captains the U.S.team.
(b)Mr Cunningham,who teaches creative writing at Yale University,is extremely funny and psychologically observant,but he is no believer in happy endings.
第一個(gè)句子使用captain的動(dòng)詞義“率領(lǐng)”,人物形象更為有力。第二個(gè)句子使用believe的名詞形式believer,這樣語氣更為強(qiáng)烈。
總結(jié)
長(zhǎng)難句的使用是一件有門檻的事情,在沒有充足把握的情況下,Essay代寫時(shí)應(yīng)該避免使用長(zhǎng)難句,而寫自己有把握的句式,同時(shí),通過一定的改寫方法把普通句式寫得簡(jiǎn)潔漂亮,這才是取得高分的可靠方法。
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